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THE BLADE OF DEFEAT



Through withering laurels , aloofness trapped me inside. 

I'm yet going and being shunned. 

The silence of aloneness nagged me inside. 

I'm digging my grave to shun to  be enslaved. 

The sword of shinning blade, chopped

My shield of ecstasy soul, 

My blithe chains to blood streams, 

My sunny days to cruel and awful nights. 

When my songs, my cries, my silences

Were being heard days after i was slain. 

As i in the cradle of grave much scorned

My defeat, the blade of defeat reached my fullness.




The theme of the given poem is the feeling of being trapped in a cycle of defeat, aloofness, and loneliness. The speaker expresses their struggle to break free from this cycle, but ultimately succumbs to it. They feel as if they are being shunned and ignored by others, which exacerbates their feelings of isolation. Despite their attempts to resist, they ultimately give in and allow themselves to be enslaved by their own defeat.


The imagery used throughout the poem reinforces this sense of despair and hopelessness. The "withering laurels" suggest that the speaker's achievements and successes are fading away, leaving them with nothing to show for their efforts. The "sword of shinning blade" symbolizes the destructive forces that are working against the speaker, cutting them down and leaving them vulnerable. The "shield of ecstasy soul" represents the speaker's inner strength and resilience, which is being eroded by their circumstances.


The repeated use of "my" emphasizes the poet's personal struggle and isolation. They feel as if they are alone in their pain, with no one to turn to or help them. This sense of solitude is further emphasized by the contrast between "sunny days" and "cruel and awful nights." The speaker's world has turned dark and bleak, and they are unable to find any light or hope.


The final lines of the poem suggest that the speaker has been defeated completely, with the "blade of defeat" reaching their "fullness." The fact that their "songs, cries, and silences" are only heard after their death reinforces the idea that they were ignored and neglected while alive.


Overall, the poem conveys a sense of despair and hopelessness. The speaker feels trapped in a cycle of defeat and isolation, with no way out. The imagery used throughout the passage reinforces this sense of despair, with the final lines suggesting that the speaker has been defeated completely.



 

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Author's note 


Myself Adil ghulam bhat, I am a poet and the author of a poetry book (100 years of my painful nights). Poetry does not have such tips because it is the art of expressing emotions, feelings and can never be based on tips. Poetry is a profound literature and plays a role with proper system. 



A creative writing technique is usually characterized by a certain rhythm and style. The modern poet wears many hats: he can write ghazals, produce commercial genre, create poetry books, write for greeting card companies, work for websites and compete in competitions; Just to have a few names.



 Learn the basics of poetry.



 A poet is one who conveys ideas and emotions to others through the written word. Although many people associate poetry with words that make poetry, a poet can choose one of the many different ways of writing to convey his message.



I will share some important ways to build a poem. 



1 Read a lot of basic poetry. 



2 improve your vocabulary (literary words). 



3 write what you feel in day to day life on a roughly page then arrange them with minimum word length. 



4 Use concrete thoughts and give them shape use poetic devices like metaphors, similies, images, personification, oxymoron etc.... 



5 Match thoughts and then you will start to become a Eminant poet.. 



         You can also read my poetry on my Personal Blog or on Youtube Poetry Blog. 






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